Well... I don't know where else to put it...

[NoBaka]

::coughs:: The blunt end of the club? Is there another end I'm not aware of?

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

Gunlord and Demon Fox... thanks for the compliments ^_^ And just think... this is only about 1/9 of the whole thing... and I didn't even get to the end. Plus, it's only in its first draft!

NoBaka... it's been a while since I read the story, but I believe it's a spiked club that Speaur uses (checks... yep, it is). If you need imagery, think a cylinder on a short pole, and the cylinder has spikes around the sides, but not the top (the blunt end). I got concept drawings for all these things... so I'm not a complete putz when I'm making imagery (just a side note... it DOES say a little farther that he hit 'em with the spiked end too...)

Glad I'm finally getting comments on this ^_^ Maybe later I'll put up some of my concept art...

[NoBaka]

Aah, I think you may mean a small morningstar. Or possibly even a spiked mace.

[Koyotae Fan]

Hm... Spiked Mace is pretty good...

And... I forgot the point of this post...

Oh yeah!

Go concept art!

>>;
All I can draw are mushrooms, so I obviously admire people who can draw more interesting things.

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

Spiked mace *shrugs* could be. I'm not the best with weapon names, I just go with whatever's implanted in my head. I dunno if it'd technically be a mace nor a morning star from my experience with them... I'll get concept art of the club/mace/morningstar/whatever it is up here soon...

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

Sorry it's a little late... but here's the next act...

Act IV: Distress at Kapo Town

Chapter 1: Trouble at Kapo?

There was a bridge connecting the Konimo and Miseeno islands. A gate had been built at the Miseeno end of the bridge to keep ninjas out. However, ninjas had taken over the gate. When they saw Tahoe, Gen, and Qui, they quickly opened the gate and fled into the city. On the right was Kapo Town, and left was Miseeno Cave. Kapo Town wasn’t very big. It had a population of about twenty and it had about fifteen buildings. “Something’s wrong here… this isn’t the Kapo that I know…” Qui knew something wasn’t right with the town… but what was it? When he went into his house, he found several ninjas inside it. “What the hell do you think you’re doing!? Get outta my house!!” “It’s ours now… beat it!” Qui couldn’t take it anymore… he took down the three ninjas that were inside his home and threw them out. “What happened here!? Did the town get run-down by ninjas or somethin’?” Indeed… there were ninjas everywhere. “Allright… lets go clear these scumbags out. Split up and take them out as quickly as possible.” Tahoe, Gen, and Qui all went outside to carry out their mission. Just as Qui instructed, each went their own way and cleared out each building… one by one. When all the ninjas were gone, one question still remained… where had all the civilians gone? Qui thought maybe they had been thrown in the wood-stock until dealt with later. When he opened it, he found that he was sort of right, and sort of wrong. The civilians were in there… but they had been dealt with already. All twenty of them were dead.

Qui couldn’t take it anymore. The people he grew up with… his family and friends… they were all gone. All he could think about is getting revenge on the ninjas. Qui approached Gen when he came out of a house. “WHERE IS THOSE NINJA BASTARDS’ HEADQUARTERS!?” “The location is unknown… but there’s a good chance it could be at Mantikoo City.” “Were going there… NOW!!” “…why?” “Those heartless assholes killed everyone in this town… I must find them so I can RETURN THE FAVOR!!!” Gen found Tahoe and told him that they were going to Mantikoo City. Before they left, Qui burned all the buildings in the town. Kapo was no more.

Chapter 2: Resistance at Miseeno Cave

There was only one way besides boat to get to Mantikoo Island… and that was going through Miseeno cave. The cave took up about one-third of the entire island, and it was pitch black through most of it. In front of the mouth to the cave was a gate. Three ninjas were standing guard there, and Qui made quick work of them when he saw them. Qui kicked down the two doors blocking their path, and they proceeded into the cave. The light didn’t last long, so Tahoe used his Seikon energy to create light. It lasted well for a long time, but Tahoe needed to stop and rest whenever he was tired. They met little resistance throughout most of the cave, just a few pockets of ninjas here and there. Qui always volunteered to annihilate the ambush parties.

After about five hours of travel, Tahoe, Gen, and Qui had finally made it out of the cave. Gen knew there wasn’t much farther to go. “On top of that incline, there is a bridge that leads to Mantikoo.” They climbed the steep hill, and stepped into the bridge. However, there was someone else waiting for them on the bridge. “Well… long time no see…” It was Gon Muhaki! ‘Impossible… we blew up that factory with him inside it!’ The trio was shocked. Gon had come back… they were in serious trouble. “Wait a sec… three against one ain’t fair…” Gon knocked Tahoe off the bridge. Fortunately, he landed safely on Moonlight Cliff. Gon stomped his foot and Speaur Kindooue dropped from the sky! ‘What’s going on!? These two are supposed to be history!’ “Now… this seems more even, don’t it!?” Qui and Gen didn’t think so… they were up against two people who were twice as strong as them. Gon punched Gen away rather easily, while Speaur pulled out two giant kali sticks and beat down Qui with them. All hope seemed lost…

Suddenly, Gon fell off the bridge into the water… as if he had been knocked off by something… or someone! Gen and Qui couldn’t believe it… standing there was Tahoe… but there was someone in front of him too. He had a goatee and short black hair that was somewhat slicked back, but yet sticking up a bit. He had dark blue pants, a black sash, black wristbands, and his ankles were wrapped in black tape. He also carried a long bo, which he threw at Speaur, knocking him off the bridge. The guy’s bo bounced off Speaur’s head and he caught it when it came back. Looking down into the water, the guy yelled, “Fools… next time, try pickin’ on someone yer own size!” This guy was arrogant… but he was a good fighter nonetheless. He and Tahoe were apparently acquainted already. “Qui, Gen, this is Braill Tshtaft.” Braill apparently was going to help them. “Going to Mantikoo?” They all nodded. “I used to live at that place… I could take you there… come with me.” Tahoe, Gen, and Qui all followed Braill across the bridge and to the gate that led to Mantikoo City. “Well… since this place isn’t gonna be stable much longer, I might as well take down the gate.” Braill beat down the door with his bo until it fell over. “Welcome to Mantikoo… don’t enjoy yerself too much.”

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

Chapter 3: Saving Mantikoo

Qui, still having his heart set on revenge, asked Braill, “Do you know anything about a shogun around here?” “Shogun? Ahh… I heard of this dude named Deamion Spikaretue. He’s been terrorizin’ Mantikoo City for a while now. I heard rumors that the regular guy is AWOL, and this idiot is taking his place fer now.” There were two shoguns? Where… and who… could the other one be? And what was with that name? ‘Deamion Spikaretue…’ it somehow sounded familiar to Tahoe. It didn’t matter… I’m sure they would find him eventually. In any case, searching Mantikoo for Seighphon was first priority. There wasn’t much to search, though. Half of the city had been devastated! According to Braill, it used to be ‘a thriving paradise… now it’s a warzone.’ It indeed looked like a warzone… there were only a few buildings left, and those few still standing had some significant damage. “We’ve been tryin’ to take down this maniac for a while now… he’s just too damn strong! He destroys the buildings and kills the people for no good reason!” They knew that he had to be taken down… anyone who disturbed the peace did.

Suddenly, a building exploded just a few feet away. When the smoke cleared, they found who caused it. He had spiked, green hair with red eyes, and wore a mask that looked like part of a skull on his face from his nose down. He wore armor and had spikes everywhere on him; on his shoulders, his arms, his hands, his waist, and his feet. He also carried a beautiful looking sword. The blade resembled a dragon breathing fire… and it was solid gold. “That’s him! That’s Deamion!” Now Tahoe knew why that name sounded familiar! That guy’s a Konimoan!

……….

Tahoe remembered the story clearly… Deamion Spikaretue was the second-strongest Konimoan in a past age. The only one better was Barimu Kamari. They had a fierce rivalry, until the day Barimu left the training ground, saying that ‘everyone else was holding him back.’ And he proved this too… when he ripped off young Ima Atione’s arm and then proceeded to kill him. Deamion followed Barimu out of the training ground… hoping to one day become stronger than him…

……….

Tahoe stepped forward. “I’ll take him on myself.” “Are you fuckin’ crazy!? Ya don’t know how strong that guy is!” “I have a good idea about how strong he is… but that doesn’t matter. I know there are only at least three Konimoans, including him and me. This may be one of the last times I get to battle someone of the same race as me…” “Ya lost it man… don’t worry, we’ll avenge you and put flowas by yer grave.” Tahoe just smiled and walked toward Deamion, who was staring at Tahoe. Tahoe stopped for a second, looked back and said, “Qui… this battle’s for you… and for all the people who have ever been harmed by the ninjas… especially those at Kapo Town.” Qui was at a loss for words… all he could do was wish Tahoe luck. Tahoe nodded and proceeded onward toward Deamion. The battle to liberate Mantikoo was about to begin…

Chapter 4: Battle of the Unbeatable Konimoans

“Y’know what? We’re some of the few Konimoans left…” One of Deamion’s eyebrows rose when Tahoe said that. He apparently was intrigued by the thought. Deamion got in a stance similar to Seighphon’s, except he had both hands on the sword. Tahoe followed suite and got into his fighting stance too. The two just stared at each other for a minute… each one sizing up the other. Deamion made the first move, with an attempted impaling through Tahoe’s face. Tahoe ducked and tried to sweep Deamion with his sword. Deamion jumped and tried a falling slash, but Tahoe rolled out of the way into a kneeling spinning slash. Deamion flattened himself against the ground and tried an upward slash. Tahoe backed up a little and tried a jab. Deamion also dodged that attack. Both were avoiding each other rather well. Eventually, both got on their feet. “So… ready for the real thing?” What was this? Tahoe just called all that a warm-up!? These Konimoans were unbelievable!

Tahoe and Deamion both got back into their fighting stances and did some more attacking and dodging. This really did make what happened before look like a warm-up! They were both very intense, and even got into a few weapon deadlocks. Tahoe appeared stronger, since he only had the Konimoan Katana from the day the Training Grounds got attacked. However, Deamion didn’t appear to be trying very hard. During a weapon deadlock, Tahoe said, “You’re not trying, are you? C’mon… gimme all ya got! I can take it!” Deamion seemed content with his demands. Deamion won the deadlock, and began brutally slashing Tahoe with his Dragon Sword. Green blood was everywhere, and Tahoe was full of deep cuts. Tahoe struck back, but Deamion’s only vulnerable spots were his upper head, a little of his chest and neck, parts of his arms, and his legs. Tahoe put a large crack in Deamion’s armor, which Deamion when proceeded to discard. Good… now he was much more vulnerable. They both took turns cutting each other up. The mix of red and green blood almost made the ground around them look brown. Neither showed signs of backing down, but both showed signs of fatigue.

Finally, Deamion delivered a blow with the broad side of his sword to Tahoe’s forehead. Tahoe appeared unconscious, so Qui proceeded to drag him off the battlefield. Tahoe suddenly awoke and pushed Qui away. “This will be a battle to the death… whether it is a physical death or a moral death…” Qui knew he was serious, so he backed off. “You’re pretty good with a sword, but let’s see how well you do without it.” Tahoe dropped his sword, and Deamion did the same. Unlike their sword stances… their fist-fighting ones were the same! All Konimoans were taught in the fighting style of the greatest warrior of the past. Now, the greatest warriors of the present used this same style. Both of the Konimoans pounded each other with a flurry of punches and kicks, every once and a while spilling blood from internal bleeding or from major scratches. They slowed down almost to a stop… then Tahoe punched Deamion in the face, and Deamion punched Tahoe in the gut. Both were hunched over from exhaustion. They had been fighting for fifteen minutes straight… giving it their all. They both charged at the same time, punching each other in the face simultaneously. Both fighters fell to the ground. All Gen, Qui, and Braill could do is watch in amazement. From his past battles, they all thought Tahoe was pretty weak… but after watching this, they found that he hadn’t put his hear into those past battles.

Both Konimoans were on the ground, laying flat on their backs. Deamion staggered up and looked at his fallen opponent. He stomped on his ribs and kicked him aside. Then, Deamion stared at the three awed spectators. After all that… Tahoe had lost. His will to fight was gone… Deamion had won that battle.

Chapter 5: Deamion’s Demise

“DAMN!! HE DIDN’T DESERVE TO BE DEFEATED LIKE THAT!!” Even though Tahoe was still alive, barely, Braill acted like he had died in the battle. But Tahoe himself didn’t die… their chances of defeating this foe were dead. Gen, Qui, and Braill all decided to attack him at the same time… this was their only shot left… Tahoe had severely weakened him… so maybe victory wouldn’t be impossible. Deamion picked up his Dragon Sword… feeling that he would need it against the spiked club Gen had gotten from Speaur Kindooue, Qui’s nanchaku, and Braill’s bo.

All three pummeled Deamion with their weapons for a few seconds, then Deamion knocked them all back with a spinning slash. Deamion then charged for an energy blast. He shot it at Braill and sent him flying backwards. Deamion kneeled from fatigue… his Zenryoku was too low! Gen and Qui struck back quickly, and knocked down Deamion. Qui stood in front of Deamion… infuriated at the substitute shogun for what happened at Kapo Town. Gen went back and helped up Braill. Qui chewed out Deamion, while he just layed there, holding himself up by his arms and looked up at him. “Do you have any idea what your people did to the innocent people at Kapo Town? I vowed to get revenge for them… but now I must also get revenge for what you did to Tahoe!” Deamion wasn’t too intimidated. He just got up, gave Qui the middle finger, and uppercutted Qui into the air. Gen quickly caught and pulled Qui away… Deamion was about to hit Qui away with his sword. All three pressed on the attack once again, but Deamion wouldn’t die.

The attacking trio was knocked away once again. Deamion was about to finish off all three of them with energy blasts, but suddenly… a sword came through Deamion’s stomach! It was Tahoe! With the little bit of energy Tahoe had left, he had impaled Deamion with his Katana! Deamion dropped to the ground. “I told you I’d fulfill my promise…” with that, Tahoe fell back down. The battle was over… without saying a word throughout the entire battle, Deamion Spikaretue had finally fallen.

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

Chapter 6: One Island Left…

Tahoe, Gen, Qui, and Braill were lucky indeed. There was a hospital still standing about a block away which all four of them rested at. Gen, Qui, and Braill were out the next day, but Tahoe would need more time. While Tahoe rested, Gen and Qui told Braill about their mission, and plotted for the next phase. “So… the last one ya got left is Monoki? Well… unless he left the region, that’s where he be. Monoki ain’t very big… it’s gonna be hard gettin’ there, though. The island moved lately and screwed up the bridge.” “We’ll figure something out…”

In three days, Tahoe was ready to travel again. Braill wasn’t kidding when he said ‘the bridge was screwed up…’ it was in three sections, temporarily bound together with rope. It was still traversable… they just needed something to patch the holes. Some people in Mantikoo City donated large pieces of lumber to their saviors. Tahoe, Gen, Qui, and Braill all got across the bridge safely, and were greeted by a small temple that had a statue of a bird on the top… the Phoenix!

……….

There was a common legend that had told of how the three Archipelagoes came to be. When the Konimoans summoned the three spirits to bring peace back to the Konimoan race, they were met with the dark spirit… the Demon. Each Archipelago consisted of four islands, and when the Demon oppressed one of the spirits, part of their being became an island where they had fallen: one island was their mind, one was their heart, one was their body, and one was their spirit. There is no fourth Archipelago because the Demon never fell…

……….

They were now standing on where the Phoenix’s spirit had landed… they had felt the spirit of the Phoenix embrace them…

[SirAuron]

[glow=green,2,300]I applaud these stories, so rich and depth, It should be a book![/glow]

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

*Shrugs* I suppose this is the manuscript to a book. I still need to change and add things here and there though. I should start writing Nashionite... that'll be a masterpiece if I ever get started on it ;;

Anyway... thanks once again for the positive comments everyone ^_^ Unfortunately, there's only one more act in this legacy =( So this friday will be the last part of this part of the story... wierd as that may sound. If you read the whole thing, that means you'll have seen 1/9 of the total story (not counting Star Arros... which is a prequel about the main character in the 2nd legacy in this same book)!

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

*Sobs* Here's the finale to the first legacy, first novel =(

Act V (Final): The Final Battle

Chapter 1: Entering the Phoenix

The Phoenix temple was beautiful. The outside was rather plain… except for the Phoenix statue. The inside reminded Tahoe a lot of the Manchu in the Training Grounds. It was incredibly long… there was red carpet on the ground, and red marble pillars along the sides. Torches were lit everywhere. At the end of the long hallway was a gold podium with a ruby on it. The wall behind it had a faded picture of the Phoenix on it. Tahoe, Gen, Qui, and Braill all nodded at each other and proceeded down the hallway. Suddenly, the two front doors behind them closed. Gon Muhaki and Speaur Kindooue were standing in front of the doors!! In front of them, Deamion Spikaretue and Seighphon Fenha! “Seighphon… we meet again at last!” “I’ve been waiting for you… everyone else stay out of our way… this battle is personal!” Just as Seighphon had instructed, everyone else moved to the half of the room closest to the doors, while Tahoe and Seighphon moved toward the ruby. Each person in that room had a grudge… and they all decided to fight who they shared that grudge with. Gen had hunted down Gon for militarial purposes… and Gen still needed to get revenge on Gon for ripping off his left arm. Speaur was furious at Qui for helping destroy the Probot factory… Qui hated Speaur for being associated with the Probot trading circle. Deamion had a long rivalry with Braill for trying to stop his reign of tyranny… Braill would never forgive Deamion for destroying Mantikoo City. Seighphon didn’t seem to have a motive against Tahoe… Tahoe just wanted answers.

All of them, with their rage fueling them, had started battling at the same time…

Gen, armed with Speaur’s spiked club, fought against Gon with his fists. Gen was determined to make sure this was the last time Gon came back. Gon started by using slow, powerful punches… which Gen blocked with the club. Whenever Gen tried to swing the club, or shoot his arm cannon, Gon would block the attack. One was not outdoing the other… both were perfectly even…

Qui and Speaur had a pure weapons battle. Qui used his nanchaku, while Speaur used his “One Man Army Blade.” The OMAB was a very dangerous weapon. It’s like having a large number of weapons into one. The OMAB can turn into various things, like a sword, a bo, nanchaku, and kali sticks. Speaur started with the bo. This gave Speaur much more range than Qui, but Qui was still faster. Qui was able to hit Speaur several times before Speaur realized the bo wasn’t working. He decided to fight fire with fire… he turned the OMAB into nanchaku!

Deamion seemed to be well rested. He was still missing his armor, and he still had all the cuts on him, except the cuts had healed into scars. Braill was really in for a fight… he wasted no time, he immediately attacked Deamion, who repelled him with his Dragon Blade. No matter how much he tried, Braill just couldn’t hit Deamion… he needed another strategy. Braill started moving everywhere… jumping over Deamion, making circles around him. When he was behind Deamion’s back, Braill struck him hard with his bo. Deamion flinched, but he was far from finished…

Seighphon immediately threw down Tahoe’s Master Blade. “Gimme a challenge…” It had been so long that Tahoe used his traditional sword. It felt really heavy compared to the Katana. Seighphon took his Katana and turned it into a ridiculously big version of a Master Blade. Seighphon needed to use two hands to wield it, but so did Tahoe with his Master Blade. Once Tahoe got used to the weight again, he could use it with one hand like he used to. Seighphon’s stance became identical to Deamion’s. Tahoe knew Seighphon’s weaknesses already… and combining this knowledge with Deamion’s fighting style may prove useful…

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

Chapter 2: The Final Duels

Gen and Gon still were even, until Gon punched the spiked club out of Gen’s hand! Gon picked up the club and began using it against Gen. He used overhand, one-handed swings that were so smooth that you would think he’d been training all his life. Gen dodged the attacks and tried to shoot the club out of Gon’s hand, but it was futile. Gon deflected every shot…

Qui and Speaur’s nanchaku war was intense. Neither could gain an advantage. Speaur eventually was able to since his nanchaku had slightly better range than Qui’s. Qui got pummeled with the kind of weapon he was a master at using. His swings were similar to Gon’s… overhand and one-handed. Qui discovered a pattern in his fighting style, and was able to counter it. Speaur found that the nanchaku had stopped working, so he switched to the pole-falchion…

Braill used his speed and agility to confuse and outmaneuver Deamion. Deamion got a few lucky shots in, but the battle was mostly dominated by Braill. Eventually, Deamion got fed up and dropped his Dragon Sword. He began using his spiked fists as weapons. He was able to nail Braill quite a few times as he was moving around. Astonished, Braill tried to figure out a different plan…

Tahoe indeed had a speed advantage, but Seighphon clearly had better range and could block better with the huge sword. Tahoe tried to outmaneuver Seighphon, but wasn’t able to. Seighphon hit Tahoe with the spike at the end of the hilt on his sword. The battle became more intense by the second… they both clashed swords and created sparks… much like the last time they met…

Gon jabbed the club into the ground, and began punching the spikes off. The spikes flew at lightning speed at Gen. Gen was able to deflect three out of the ten, four missed either by Gen dodging them or just bad aim, and three were direct hits: one in Gen’s right arm and two in his chest. Finally, Gon punched off the metal part where the spikes used to be. It hit Gen at an incredible speed and sent him flying backwards. Gon finished off his attack by sharpening and throwing the remaining shaft at Gen. The pointed end went right into Gen’s abdomen.

Speaur found instant success with the pole-falchion. He managed to give Qui several deep cuts before Qui noticed that the falchion style was much like the bo. Qui countered it the same way. Getting discouraged, Speaur flipped the blade to create a scythe. But once again, Qui noticed the weakness in it. It was time to switch to the sword…

Braill couldn’t come up with a new strategy fast enough. Deamion pummeled him with a flurry of furious punches before Braill began defending. Braill aimed for his legs… it worked! Braill brutally assaulted Deamion’s legs with his bo. Deamion quickly caught on and got up with a rising uppercut. Braill aimed for the head, since he figured Deamion would block lower. This plan didn’t work… Deamion was completely alert to Braill’s every attack…

Tahoe and Seighphon began hitting each other with the broad sides and hilt ends to simply weaken, but not defeat their opponent. They both wanted to preserve the battle as long as possible… but suddenly, Seighphon began using the sharp part of his sword against Tahoe… he had developed that scary mission to kill Tahoe again. This is where the true battle would begin…

Gen pulled out the shaft and threw it back. Gon simply dodged it, and it hit Deamion in the back! Though injured… Gen shot at Gon with his arm-cannon… Gon either deflected or dodged the attacks. Almost every time a shot missed, it hit Deamion. Gon was inadvertently defeating his own ally! Gen kept firing anyway… seeing this as a good opportunity to help out Braill… even if he couldn’t save himself. Gon began charging at Gen… Gen continued to fire and Gon still dodged and deflected…

The sword seemed to be working well for Speaur… he was doing a number on Qui. Qui couldn’t find a weakness in the sword… all he could do is defend until he could find one…

Braill was saved! Because Gon had inadvertently let the attacks hit Deamion, Braill was able to strike back. Braill began a fierce assault with his bo on Deamion… Deamion was slowly being worn down… victory seemed imminent for Braill…

Tahoe and Seighphon’s battle intensified. Red and green blood was flying everywhere… much like Tahoe’s battle with Deamion. Konimoan’s blood was a variety of colors… but it was just coincidental that Seighphon’s and Deamion’s blood were the same color. Both seemed evenly matched, until Seighphon slashed Tahoe in the forehead like before…

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

Chapter 3 (Final): Seighphon’s Death

Deamion was the first one to fall. The shots from Gen, Braill was able to beat down Deamion rather easily. Braill had practically beaten Deamion to death… or at least to unconciousness. Deamion ceased to move… and breathe for that matter. Deamion Spikaretue had been defeated at the hands of Braill Tshaft. Now the question was… who needed help the most?

Right as Gon reached Gen, Braill came behind Gon and whacked him in the back of the neck so hard that he collapsed. Gon Muhaki had fallen similarly to Deamion.

Speaur eventually got tired of Qui blocking, so he switched the sword to his weapon of choice… kali sticks! Speaur pummeled Qui violently with them… Qui was slowly being worn down. Right when Qui was about to drop his guard… Gen and Braill came to his rescue! All three easily took down Speaur… all that was left was Seighphon…

Seighphon had the advantage for a while after that… but Tahoe still held on. They got into a weapon deadlock… Gen tried to distract Seighphon, but he got a fist for his efforts. Qui tried next, but got an energy ball for his trouble. Braill didn’t try… he knew that the same thing would happen to him. “Qui… Gen… stay back. Let Tahoe handle this.” Qui wasn’t one to sit around, though. “Well… we gotta do something! Let’s at least cheer him on.” So, all three of them started chanting “Ta-hoe… Ta-hoe…” When Tahoe heard this, his morale went up… not really because of the chant itself, but because his friends were victorious and alive. Tahoe gained strength and was able to push Seighphon back. Tahoe eventually won the deadlock, and Seighphon stumbled backwards. Tahoe delivered a blow to the forehead that wasn’t meant to be fatal, but apparently was. Seighphon fell to the gound… and apparently back to normal.

Tahoe could see that his brother was dying. He kneeled next to him and picked up his head. “Tahoe… I’m sorry… I was possessed…” “It’s okay Seighphon… I knew it the whole time…” Gen, Qui, and Braill were shocked! “Y… you did?” “Yes… and we’re gonna save you…” “There’s nothing you can do for me now… It’s time for me to go…” Both of them had tears in their eyes. “Sai… yo… na… ra… Tahoe…” With those last words, Seighphon Fenha, who had become Seighphon Dema for a while, was dead. “Saiyonara… Seighphon.” Without saying anything more, Tahoe vowed to get revenge on whoever did this to him. Tahoe silently walked out of the Phoenix temple and buried his brother in front of it. Seighphon’s Katana marked where he had been buried. Tahoe knew that Seighphon would protect and guide his little brother on his long journey.

Epilogue

Tahoe continued to go back to the grave of Seighphon and pray at it. Gen and Qui went back to their special forces jobs, and took Braill along with them. A few days later, Gen found Tahoe while he was at his brother’s grave. “Tahoe… we got a problem. We need your help with it.” Tahoe silently arose and went with Gen. This was where the road to vengeance for his brother’s death would begin…

Well... that's the end of that. Any comments are always appreciated and I'll answer any questions you may have ^_^ Otherwise... I hope you enjoyed it!

[Iris]

Mmm...if you don't mind me giving a little constructive criticism...your chapter divisions are a bit short. More the length I'd call a scene than a chapter. I'd suggest either combining chapters to make them longer, or expanding on the ones you already have. Different people have different opinions, but I think a good chapter length starts at somewhere around 1500 words minimum, and typically longer (my current work, I shoot for 4000, although the finished chapters so far are clocking in at more like 3900).

Different people will define a good chapter length differently, of course, but if I don't have to hit page scroll to see the whole chapter, I think it could use some expansion. ^^;;;

Just my two cents.

[Lord Ryu Li Ri Tzu]

You got a very good point... although, I noticed that already. I was hoping to expand parts in the story. Just remember that this is just a first draft... it's far from finalized.